JoLynn (Chapter 1) - Sun 29 Jul 2018

All I wanted was a little something to pass a few minutes of time. So I read this and instead wound up going through a rainbow of emotions in a span of three minutes. 

 

I find your description of her emotional state incredibly deep. Either you've felt the real, soul crushing depression (not the "I'm sad for a day" bologna) that can do real damage to one's psyche, or you've known someone on a very personal level that has suffered it. That's the only way I can describe how well you wrote this first chapter.

 

This is a very good start! I look forward to reading what comes next. 


sesshys_jaded_samuri (Chapter 1) - Sun 29 Jul 2018

A very promising start.  I like it very much.  Please continue.


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